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【English Corner】长期活动① 纠错贴

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猪八戒三代

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于是发现上面已经有人改过了……
继续,进行缺德的行为……
同一个连接,不过是沙发不是楼主
然后我懒得写行数了.
"but I never received even one letter except one call, which i just miss..."
but I haven't recieved even one letter except for a call, which i just missed..
"I need to send as more as possible"
I need to send as much as possible
"I need someone else help with my homework "
I need someone else to help with my homework
"what's else"
what else?
"I don't wanna be a last minutes person but I usually do"
I don't want to be a procrastinator but i usually am
※一般一个做东西都在最后一刻完成的,被称为procrastinator
"When you think you cannot make it, just think about there are still a lot of people struggle with food and water, you can feel better."
When you think that you cannot make it, just think about all the people who still struggle with food and water, then you can feel better.
"because we had a imporv activities today, If I were the one who is from one or two years ago, I may feel suck because maybe I cannot understand these kinds of things, but today, I can find fun and do it better. "
because we had an improv① activity② today. If I was③still the one from one or two years ago, I may suck④ because I couldn't understand⑤ these kinds of things, but today, I can find fun in it ⑥ and do it better.
※于是,发现这个的错误很多,所以我列出错误来,解释一下
①Improv 拼写错误,还有因为是元音i,所以前面必须是AN
②既然说是AN(一个),所以后面的Activity也必须是一个.
③自己是一个的.
④你不能"感觉到自己SUCK"
⑤因为是在说过去的自己,所以必须用过去式
⑥在哪里找到FUN?
"make yourself happy is the most important thing"
making yourself happy is the most important thing
"I think I may more happy after I have a car"
I think that I may be more happy when I have a car
"For me, there is few chance to do one thing without purpose expect reading romantic fiction..."
For me, there are few chances ①to do something without a purpose, except② for reading romantic fiction
※列出几个重要的错误.其实还有的
①few chances是多个的,所以不能用"is"这个来形容,需要用"are"
②expect是期待,盼望,except是除了
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肥叮当

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another day has gone.
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oh...
肥叮噹要抱走咯
感謝各位貢獻 - -
mua~!
phwlj

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恼是想出来的,气是比出来的,急是造出来的,病是吃出来的。
举报 只看该作者 22楼  发表于: 2011-06-16 0
关于Spend的说法,我同意。但原句时态有错
本文来自派派小说论坛 :http://www.paipai.fm/r6231713_u14930393/
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Very useful, thank you ^^
我疯了……

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滴不尽相思血泪抛红豆,开不完春柳春花满画楼。
举报 只看该作者 24楼  发表于: 2011-07-22 0
我刚刚看了下前面的内容啊。提出的错误有些根本没有语法错误,更正之后只是把句子变得更趋于诗歌的韵律化,或者仅仅变个顺序什么的……
大家不要为了改错能加分而改错啊,更不要误导我们了。
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对扫文的狂热。毒。
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谁捡走了我的玻璃鞋,寻找遗失的玻璃鞋.
I am looking for the missing glass-shoes who has picked it up
--> Who found my glass slippers, I am looking for my lost glass slippers.
==》Who found my missing slippers, for which I have been looking .
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举报 只看该作者 26楼  发表于: 2011-11-06 0
帖子名称: 美丽的句子 漂亮的翻译
帖子链接: http://www.paipai.fm/r6201116/
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The lonesomest thing most people not get, you know,
最凄凉最弄人的不是你知道,
Lost loved that moment,
失去所爱的那一刻,
But you still wandering,
而是你还在徘徊,
Judah did not know that has been lost.
犹未知道已经失去.

應是:

The most lonesome thing that most people don't get
最凄凉最弄人的不是你知道

Is not the very moment when you've learned you had lost your loved one
失去所爱的那一刻,

But you're still wondering around
而是你还在徘徊

Without knowing that you've actually lost it
犹未知道已经失去
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帖子名称: 美丽的句子 漂亮的翻译
帖子链接: http://www.paipai.fm/r6201116/
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When I love you, but you do not know this love;
When you know this love too, but I already tired.

應是:

When I'm in love with you,  you do not know this love;
But after you've learned about this love too, I'm already tired.
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帖子链接: http://www.paipai.fm/r6212472_21/
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1. Sometimes   everyone  want  to  be  assisted
--> Everyone wants to be assisted sometimes / Sometimes, everyone  wants  to  be  assisted

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1. TO assist somebody is very important in their life..
--> To assist somebody is very important in their lives.

2. You never assist me whatever i have done .
--> You never assist with whatever I have done . / You have never assisted in whatever I have done
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1. Sometimes   everyone  want  to  be  assisted
--> Everyone wants to be assisted sometimes / Sometimes, everyone  wants  to  be  assisted

mistakes所在的楼层: 311楼

1. TO assist somebody is very important in their life..
--> To assist somebody is very important in their lives.

2. You never assist me whatever i have done .
--> You never assist with whatever I have done . / You have never assisted in whatever I have done
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tf82

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小問題可以在這裡提嗎?
http://www.paipai.fm/r6231717/
7楼
雖然只是一個字,但很多人搞錯
在這裡大人應該是想說good idea

ideal 是一個adjective
idea 是一個noun
good 也是一個 adjective
你不會用一個adjective去形容另外一個adjective

you can say: it's a good idea or even a ideal idea:)

ps 格式有誤請告知,謝謝
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http://www.paipai.fm/r6214224/
floor 13

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Original sentence: oh, my god, i must to stay at home until school term beginning. i am so boring, my dad had go to workplace, and my mum will go there day after tomorrow. when my mum go there, i will be one person stay at home.


A few suggestions and corrections for you.
1.) When you are writing don't use spoken English.  Eg. "oh, my god".
2.) Always use proper punctuation and remember to capitalize your pronouns when writing. Eg. "I" not "i".
3.)Remember that words ending in "-ing" are supposed to be used to show possession.  The noun used in the sentence much show ownership. The sentence "I'm so boring." is correct; however, I believe you're trying to say, "I'm (I am) so bored." meaning that you are having the feeling of boredom.  
So after those suggestions your writing should look a little more like this....

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Corrected sentence: I must stay at home until the school term begins.  I'm so bored because my dad has to go to work and my mum will also be going there in two days. When she goes, I will be home alone.


That's it for now :)
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名称 3月签到贴
链接 http://www.paipai.fm/r6215010/
错误楼层 68

拼写错误 第二句 counsumed 应该是consumed
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— (左。微希) 这是纠错贴,也就是用于,指出别人错误的帖子。求助的话,请下次移步求助贴 http://www.paipaitxt.com/r5173302/ (2012-07-03 23:11) —
有个美国朋友在电话中建议我用一个聊天软件,因我不知他说的是什么软件。就说: ' why don't you send the software to me through the netwok ?  (我想要他通过网上的E-mail什么的传给我), 但对方回应:‘What?I don't  understand!   请教,我英语说错啦?
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✭ 1/9 ✬ 3/25 ✫ 6/2 ✭
举报 只看该作者 34楼  发表于: 2015-03-05 0
3月签到帖
http://www.paipai.fm/r6612869_7/
92楼 frient应改为 friend
102楼 egg应改为eggs

http://www.paipai.fm/r6612869_9/

121楼 be this like应改为 be like this
125楼 cook应改为cooked
128楼 feeling应改为feel


rbdy

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回 32楼(宠物王1997) 的帖子
可能他不太清楚 network 是指什么, 不如干脆写 "Could you email me the software?"
sion2012

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帖子名称 12月签到帖
帖子链接 http://www.paipai.fm/r6717236_4/
mistakes所在的楼层
指出错误,并改正。


55层
I was moved.
这句话的语法错误类型是sf(sentence fragment)意思是语句不完整。
她想说的可能是 I moved.(我搬走了)或者 I was moved by the movie. 我被(电影)所感动。因为单纯的被动是缺少宾语的,如果直译她的句子就是 我被xx感动,sf。

50层
It's quite tough to keep fit and I will try my best to achieve it.错误类型:ro(run-on)两个完整句子不能用"coordinating conjunction"连接(拓展阅读:http://www.chompchomp.com/terms/coordinatingconjunction.htm) 正确使用是:It's quite tough to keep fit; and I will try my best to achieve it.或者使用句号。(标点符号后需要空一格为语法规定)


49层
I'm still very tired ah, to work overtime. to do something 是属于infinitives,wf 但明显这里不是表达还要去工作,而是表达:我很累因为我过度工作。所以应该是:I'm still very tired for work overtime.


45层
eyes are ache 首先缺少定语,定语是必须的,虽然中文貌似不太要求。然后ache是用作名词或者动词.  所以更正:I felt an ache in my eyes.                
或者 My eyes ache.


44层
Today is Wednesday, I want to eat sausage. ro 应该是:Today is Wednesday; I want to eat sausage.


41层
Rianing,raining.i so hate this weathe and so miss sun. sp 拼错了俩 raining weather


33
Today I become a formal membership of paipai. vt Today I became a formal membership of paipai.


32 the weather of Guangdong  changes often. mm The weather of Guangdong  often changes.


31
December is the last month of the year 2015,come on baby. ro December is the last month of the year 2015;come on baby.


26
love isa lie, it can not be forever, ro+sp Love is a lie; it can not be forever. 后半句我觉得应该是:Love(it) often doesn't last forever. be forever 我不知道有没有错我是没怎么听过,然后can是当做“能力” ,爱 没有能力 作为 永远。我觉得很奇怪。我写的是 爱 一般 不能 持续  到永远。


23
today  is  the frist day of  month. sp+sf+p 拼写错误: first 然后month不加定冠词the 就表示 所有月份。所以这句的意思是 今天是每月的第一天。 更正:Today  is  the first day of  this month.


22 It's a new day!Not only it's the new beginning of the month,but also mine ! sf  not only, but also 是correlative conjunction。句子明显不完整,然后这句话but also 后面和前面的内容不对称。我使用这个片段,补全了下作为例子:Not only did December first is the new beginning of this month, but it also gave me a new chance to earn pb.如果后面是完整句子 do 是必须的,然后后面的主语要在but和also之间。


19
I want I have some good news. ww  I hope I will have some good news.作为预测,应该是我希望,而不是我想要。(个人感觉)然后改变了时态。


18 Every morning is a difficult family to get up.dm    早上是个困难家族去起床。虽然family可能是我不知道的用法,但早上作主语的话就变成了早上 起床,而不是你早上起床。“早上”是不能起床的,起床的是你,所以dm了。然后有点怪异,我重写了下:It is tough for me to get up earlier in the morning.


17 Today the weather is good, but the fog haze, Lu bucket can't see. p+ro+dm today 是个introductory material,所以需要一个comma。后面lu bucket 是个人还是特殊名词,特殊名词后面的bucket也要大写,然后我没看懂是啥东西。如果是一个不是人的东西,那也有点问题,因为他不能看,所以这个物品要有能力去看,是dm错误,显然某些物品是不能看的。比如 我能看见鼠标。(无误) 鼠标不能被我看见。(无误) 鼠标不能看。(错误) 更正:Today, the weather is good, but the fog haze; Lu bucket can't be seen.




13
This is new January new day, come on. ww+ro 错词:December 我不记得两个宾语的错误叫什么了。然后更正 This is the new day of December.Come on.


6 I need coffer. ww coffee


5 Today is the first time I Sign in  here, my oral English is so poor, to practice exercises = ro sf Today is the first time I sign in  here. My oral English is so poor, so I need to practice more exercises .=是大小写错误


错误类型最多的是sf dm ww p 缺少主语太多了,句号错误或者缺少句号,大小写问题懒得贴了。我以为会出现很多代词问题,事实上没人使用代词……

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帖子:please get me a good movie about dog
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Original content: i like dog, has somebody get me a good movie about dog.

A better and correct way of saying that would be: I like dogs, could somebody please recommend a good movie about dogs to me?

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美丽的句子 漂亮的翻译
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Original: Love is not a matter of counting the days. It's making the days count.

爱情不是数着日子过去,它让每个日子都变得有意义。

Corrections: Love is not about counting the days. It makes everyday counts.

Original: First love is unforgettable all one's life.

初恋是永生难忘的。

Corrections: First love is unforgettable in life.

Original: In the very smallest cot there is room enough for a loving pair.

哪怕是最小的茅舍,对一对恋人来说都有足够的空间。

Corrections: Even the tiniest flat is spacious enough for a pair of lovers.

Original: There is no hiding from lover's eyes.

什么也瞒不过恋人的眼睛。

Corrections: Nothing can hide from a lover's eyes.

Original: Love is a fire which burns unseen.

爱情是无形燃烧的火焰。

Corrections: Love is fire, burining invisibly.

Original: But if the while I think on thee, dear friend, all losses are restored, and sorrows end.

只要我一想起你,亲爱的人,所有的失落和遗憾烟消云散

Corrections: Once I think of you, my dear, all the sorrows and disappointment disappear.
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Today, my high school had a big band concert and so my friend and her older brother (whom i somewhat i like [1] and will call boy A) drove with me and my mom  [2] to the concert place
...
so my mom was saying how boy B was soo much nicer and lovely?!?!?!?!? than boy A!!!! [3]

[1]: 多余的一个 i - whom i somewhat like
[2]: with my mom and me
[3]: my mom was saying how boy B was soo much nicer and lovelier (or more lovely) than boy A!


2L
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Wish you continue to update~~[1]

[1] Wish you will continue to update~~




3L
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You seems  to be a new paier~~[1]

[1] You seem to be


10L
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There has been soooo much snow and midterms are postponed for another 2 day!!![1]

[1] Another 2 days
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    派派币 +10 2017-07-07

    Thanks for your correction.

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